Review by dragonkiri |
2006-10-23
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Very ambitious story you're writing here... I've read the first four chapters, and I'm enjoying it very much so far. I rather like how you haven't merely adapted things - actually rewriting the story and having different things happen is a refreshing change. It's nice to not know exactly what's going to happen next!
My only complaint is that the descriptions of the girls tend to rub me the wrong way, since they're repeated over and over again. You've used "the odango-haired blo... (more) |
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