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Review by Loki |
2006-08-21
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I thought this one fascinating
Firstly, there were some minor flaws, tense, some grammar and spelling typos, _neither women_ should be, neither woman. and _alright_ should be written as, all right. But those things aside, it was a remarkable story, the emotional tapesty you wove across several life-times was superbly done. Kudos on that.
Highlights:
I really enjoyed your dialogue, it flows so beautifully, its engaging style draws in the reader and holds your interst. Not only this, but it moves you, too. Your characterisation was excellent as with all those stories of yours I have read thus far. visualisation and the way you set up a scene is well set out. the concept of soulmates and previous lives is a given for me, so I thought you conveyed an interesting take on those aspects of memory relating to previous existence. Makes me think of the saying, not sure where it comes from re-the man is but a butterfly dreaming it is a man. Salutations on a job well done. I suggest if you continue to proof read your work and brush up on technical skills, you will be capable of anything as a writer and go far, how far is up to you! Good luck and thank you for the experience. *hands you a crystal wheel and roses* L.
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