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Review by Bella*Luna |
2007-08-03
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This was so amazingly sweet! I loved it so much. It was nice to see this side of George. To know that he can be sweet and serious and care about something.
The end confused me a bit. I didn't quite understand how they had all come to be in the common room the Christmas after Bill and Fleur's wedding (unless in this stories reality Harry, Ron and Hermione didn't go trotting the globe on their mission, which is possible).
Also, you flip back and forth between Luna and George's point of view, which is fine, but you should watch closely as not to confuse whom you are writing as the 'narrator' at each section. I saw a few times where it jumped back and forth in the same section.
But other than my confusion, the rest of it was great!
Another good job! ^.~
•Shel
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