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Reviews on All Kidding Aside by Kihin Ranno
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Review by ScarlettShannon |
2007-06-07
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You. You!
You wrote something like this, and you never TOLD ME?? You never once took it upon yourself to say, "Hey, Shannon! I wrote this amazing RS fic!!!" Because really, you should have told me. I would have read it, and I would have been an RS shipper much longer ago than just last month.
Actually, I take that back, because in all actuality, you DID tell me. I'm just mad that you didn't tell me on the eve of our meeting of each other, like two years agoish. And actually, I'm not even mad at all. I am in love with you, and you can take that in any number of ways, all of which are true right now.
When I re-read this, (which I undoubtedly shall do someday) I am going to copy and paste all my favorite bits and show you, because I laughed my ass off. At my work desk. I disturbed those around me in their cubicles with my laughage.
Whoever had the stupidity to tell you anything bad about this fic was clearly dropped on their head as a child. (I was actually hit in the head with a vacuum cleaner, but as that's not helping my validity at all, just pretend I didn't say that.) THIS IS AMAZING!
And you know what? It's totally set up for a SEQUEL. I mean, it's basically PERFECTLY SET UP for one. Peter being all left out, leads him to be all evil n shit. Lover's quarrels all around. NC-17 bits, perhaps. (Because after all, they're big boys now.) SO.... if you make your way back to HP-land one day, I think a sequel is something that you should consider, m'dear. :)
This is really long. But you deserve it. I'm sure if I wasn't hiding from prying eyes in my cubicle I could come up with 4,500 different ways of saying how amazing this was and how much I enjoyed reading this. Because I DID. A lot. Knowing the author of a fic really makes you feel like you're having a moving and emotional personal experience with them. (Or at least... I felt that way!)
Thank you for this!!!
Loves,
Shannon
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Author's response:
Who, me? :D
I think at the time that I figured out how involved in the fandom you were, I was avoiding everything connected with it, so it probably didn't even occur to me to show it to you. Besides, I think it's better that you started off with Shoebox. Granted, everything else will pale in comparison, but still, it's SHOEBOX.
Please do copy and paste your favorite bits. I love hearing about what exactly grabbed people in a chapter. I have my favorite lines, but then other people latch on to other things I didn't even think were that awesome. It boosts my ego muchly.
Vaccum cleaner huh? That explains a lot... ^.~ Anyway, the only actual negative thing I've heard about the fic was a complaint about Peter being so incompetent that the other boys would have nothing to do with him, but you know, I think Peter's probably not normally this much of a blob, but there's been tension in the group building for a long time and it's had an effect on him. This explosion makes it a lot worse.
And rambling! Moving on.
I already told you my answer on the sequel, so moving along... Oh, except, there would totally be NC-17 bits should I ever choose to do it since I was cruel and did not have them get very far in this fic. XD
No, I love long reviews, and I really cannot tell you how much I appreciate you taking the time to do this. I get what you mean about it being different when you know the person in RL. I don't know, it's validating somehow. I think another reason why I didn't say anything about the fics is because I'm really self-conscious about people I can actually see critiquing my work in any way. I can handle just about anything when it's coming from a faceless entity, but when it gets Frech-ified right in front of me? I don't do so well. So thank you, thank you so much for being perfectly lovely about this and for enjoying it as much as you did. It fills me with joy.
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Review by lover_eternal |
2007-03-09
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By far one of the best fan fictions I have ever read. I actually started this fan fiction in the summer. I started to work at Starbucks so because my co-workers were absolutley insane I got completely distracted. I had printed out the first seven chapters and read it during school but lost the chapters in my room. Which by the way is a black hole. The place where I had first started reading this fanfic had stopped linking to this fanfiction. Then, just last week, somehow I had just run across it. It was completely random. The only reason why I had stopped reading before hand was because you (being the author) hadn't finished writing it yet. I somehow found the first seven chapters in my room so I caught up to where I was. Finding out that you had finished was the best thing ever. I mean, I was left with Sirius just realizing that he was bent for Remus Lupin. I thought I would die because of that cliff hanger. Well, this is the one fan fiction that I continued and restarted to read. It was absolutely phenomenal! I loved it and it was worth waiting around half a year to finally get to know the ending. Bravo to you!!!!
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Author's response:
Thank you so much. ^_^ I'm so happy to hear you liked it so much, and that you were able to come across it again! I'd hate to be enjoying a story that much only to have it disappear and not know where to find it again. And yeah, leaving it off at that point would suck on monumental proportions.
Thank you very, very much for your review!
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Review by Jessica Pendragon |
2006-11-29
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I know very little about the Harry Potter realm(I've only seen the movies) but that doesn't really matter, I still really enjoyed this story. All it took was a little research(and hey, I'm a librarian, it's what I do) and I was all in the know. I'm a big fan of dialogue - I think it's the most important part to a story - and I was blown away by your skills in this piece. I love wacky and witty British humor too and you've got it totally down pat in this, and I will most likely be talking with an accent for the rest of the day. =P It captured my attention, made me laugh, and was an excellent story all around.
The only criticism I can think of was some sentences it seemed like you erased part of the text to write something else but then forgot to erase it all...if that makes sense? Well it's not a big deal so, yeah. Anyways, great job!
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Author's response:
I have not responded to this! Such a travesty must be remedied.
I'm happy to hear you liked it even without reading the books (which you really should do sometime) as most of the information about these characters comes from there.
The dialogue's my favorite part as well. I think there were parts where it went on a little too long, but overall I'm glad you think it was the best part of the story.
Yeah, that thing with the sentences happens to be a lot sadly.
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Review by Anonymous |
2006-07-15
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This was probably the best Sirius/Remus availible to the fanbase. So witty and funny and sad sometimes. Up until the end it was great.
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Author's response:
Thank you very much! I'm sad you'll probably never see this, but still, thank you! ^^;
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Review by amy |
2006-06-06
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Sometimes witty and clever, and sometimes quite scathing, the great strength of this story is the dialog. It has a very consistent rhythm whether the characters are discussing emotional issues or toast. The jokes are well done and flow naturally with the dialog.
Another strong point of the story is that you manage to remain true to canon while still expanding the characters. I love the little insights into the characters which may or may not be accurate in canon, but are at least possible. Although I dislike Peter in general, I tend to feel a little sorry for him in your story. Conversely, I find Lily (a character who often seems a bit idealized) to be extremely annoying.
I can’t say that there is anything I found particularly lacking. The pace seems fine, the plot is interesting, the characterizations are wonderful, and the story is generally enjoyable. I really like this piece.
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Author's response:
Thank you very much for your review. ^_^
Dialogue is my favorite part to any story. I often say that I tend to act like anything in between is superfluous, and that's probably because I tend to think in terms of the theater. When you get a script, you generally don't have a lot to go on BUT the dialogue. I was generally taught to disregard the stage directions, so all I had was the words the characters were saying to interpret what was going on. I still consider it to be the most important part to any story, and no one will convince me otherwise.
I hate Peter as much as the next guy, but at the same time, he's pitiable. The circumstances of his upbringing made his turn damn nigh inevitable (though I'd love to see what would happen if he hadn't caved to Voldie). Boys will be boys, and boys love to get together and insult each other (all in good fun of course), but I think hearing it from his idols over and over again (because let's face it - Peter's an easy target) had to eventually send him over the edge. I also get the feeling that he did feel guilty about it, but he managed to convince himself that he did the right thing not just by saving his own life but because his memory has blown a lot of otherwise harmless incidents out of proportion. What happens in Rat's Eye View is something of a turning point for Peter, as he was the brunt of Sirius's cruelty for the for the first time. I think it is a memory he's going to carry with him, and it will likely have a great impact on him in the years to come.
The Lily I saw in the OotP flashback was someone who I felt would grow up into a good person; however, I also thought she was very self-righteous with a very strong personality that could be quite grating. In HP fics, there is a tendency to always have her be mature, while I think Lily thinks she's mature. I do think she is a good person. She isn't selfish, she isn't often cruel, but she has a tendency to be outspoken and doesn't know how to reign it in. She'd be particularly insufferable around the other Marauders I think. She's spent the past 6 years secure in her moral superiority, and actually getting to know them is disconcerting. I think that she has to live beyond Hogwarts in order to get to an ideal place in her personality.
Thanks for all your feedback, and you'll be interested to know that I'm almost done with the next chapter, so expect to see that up and around shortly. ^^
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